Term 2 writing :recounts

Here we go.  Shoow there we were. There was a gigantic black stadium.with a playground next to it. It was very late in Christchurch.   It was time for bed. Mitch was cosy the bed was white and red. I went to sleep. I woke up early in the morning at 7.00 clock. We arrived early.30 minutes later it was time for practice.Everyone was on the massive start gate. Bang! The gate dropped. We went down the huge ramp. I  rode the track jumping, pumping the track.it was time for racing. I was nervous. There were thousands of people I. The crowd. Shoow! As quick as cheetah. I came second,third ,first and third .I made it to the semifinals  and came quick but not quick enough the final. I was sad. My sister was cheering for me on the sideline. There was food on sale. I went to buy something quickly so I won't miss my dads race. He made it with a placing of 4th It had a little place to give the top three trophies. They  were shiny like the sun. There were bikes signatures Inside it was white and black witha grey top and side. We went back to the hotel.  

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I am working on making my writing more detailed . I want to improve my writing by adding a little bit of speech.